Expository Essay. Being more concerned about others. Reason/Attribute 2. Reason/Attribute 1 N F I 1. 2.

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1 Prompt: WRITE an essay explaining whether people should be more concerned about others than themselves. Expository Essay 1 Being more concerned about others 2 F BY Being more concerned about otherswhat happens? N F I Punch List- specific examples Change MLK- fight for equal rights- I have a Dream Improve Harriet Tubman- risked her life and sacrificed her health by taking people to freedom- Underground Railroad Unselfish- long term-of Mice & Men-George took Lennie out of his misery by shooting him so he wouldn t get hanged or beaten. Save heroes of rushed into burning bldg to save strangers Putting others first- Tuesdays with Morrie- Morrie listened to other problems and shared his experience with others until the very end Provide safety and opportunities parents work & make sacrifies so their children can be healthy and safe L

2 Step 3 Divide the 6 specific examples into either Group Group B based on what they have in common

3 1 Being more concerned about others 2 F N F I L B B B Punch List- specific examples Change MLK- fight for equal rights- I have a Dream Improve Harriet Tubman- risked her life and sacrificed her health by taking people to freedom- Underground Railroad Unselfish-long term-of Mice & Men-George took Lennie out of his misery by shooting him so he wouldn t get hanged or beaten. Save heroes of rushed into burning bldg to save strangers Putting others first- Tuesdays with Morrie- Morrie listened to other problems and shared his experience with others until the very end Provide safety and opportunities parents work & make sacrifies so their children can be healthy and safe

4 1 Being more concerned about others 2 Provide safety and opportunities F N F I B B B Putting others first Punch List- Unselfish- long term Change Change specific examples Improve Improve Harriet Tubman- risked her life and sacrificed her health by taking people to freedom- Underground Railroad Unselfish-long term- Of Mice & Men-George took Lennie out of his misery by shooting him so he wouldn t get hanged or beaten. Save lives MLK- fight for equal rights- I have a Dream Save heroes of rushed into burning bldg to save strangers L Lead-in 5. Putting others first-tuesdays with Morrie- Morrie listened to other problems and shared his experience with others until the very end 6. Provide safety and opportunities parents work & make sacrifies so their children can be healthy and safe 7. God sacrificed his Son for the forgiveness of our sins.

5 Responsible Being more concerned about others Impact Lives Provide safety and opportunities Putting others first Unselfish- long term Change Improve F N F I Save lives L

6 Responsible Being more concerned about others Impact Lives Provide safety and opportunities Putting others first Unselfish-long term Change Improve F N F I Save lives L Write the Thesis Statement using the exact words from the prompt and the attributes with power verbs. Prompt: WRITE an essay explaining whether people should be more concerned about others than themselves. People should be more concerned about others than themselves because by doing so, people embrace responsibility and influence the lives of others. fter reading this thesis, does the reader know: 1. Exactly what the prompt asked? 2. The writers perspective- caring for oneself or others? 3. What the 2 body paragraphs will discuss?

7 Introduction 1. Lead in sentence- ttention Grabber- should NOT be a repeat of the thesis. 2. Thesis Statement For God so loved the world that he gave his only Son. Would human life exist if God had not cared more about others than himself? People should be more concerned about others than themselves because by doing so, people embrace responsibility and influence the lives of others.

8 Body Paragraph- Topic Sentence- insert a sentence telling the reading what the main idea of the paragraph. Then introduce the specific examples and explain the connection between the example and the prompt. Responsible Provide safety and opportunities Putting others first Unselfish-long term F N BY Being more concerned about otherswhat happens? Taking responsibility for other people can be challenging but also rewarding. For example, parents work to provide a safe home, food, and clothes for their children. It isn t always easy for parents to meet youngsters needs, but they do it because of the love and concern they have for their children. Special friends are also more concerned about others and show this by putting other s before themselves. Next, when people are more concerned about others, they make decisions based on what s best for the people they love rather than what s best for themselves. No literature or historical reference- underdeveloped

9 Body Paragraph- Topic Sentence- insert a sentence telling the reading what the main idea of the paragraph. Then introduce the specific examples and explain the connection between the example and the prompt. Responsible Provide safe- parents work & make sacrifices so their children can be healthy and safe Give people hope- Tuesdays with Morrie- Morrie listened to other problems and shared his experience with others until the very end Provide safety and opportunities Putting others first Unselfish-long term Take people out of misery- Of Mice & Men-George took Lennie out of his misery by shooting him so he wouldn t get hanged or beaten. F N BY Being more concerned about otherswhat happens? Taking responsibility for other people can be challenging but also rewarding. For example, parents work to provide a safe home, food, and clothes for their children. It isn t always easy for parents to meet youngsters needs, but they do it because of the love and concern they have for their children. Special friends are also more concerned about others and show this by putting other s before themselves. In Tuesdays with Morrie, Morrie continuously put others before himself by listening to their problems and offering advice, even when he was on his deathbed. Next, when people are more concerned about others, they make decisions based on what s best for the people they love rather than what s best for themselves. perfect example of this is when George shot Lennie in Of Mice and Men. George loved Lennie and didn t want to kill him, but he did it because he didn t want Lennie to be hanged or beaten.

10 Body Paragraph- Impact Lives Change MLK- fight for equal rights- I have a Dream Change Improve Save lives Improve Harriet Tubmanrisked her life and sacrificed her health by taking people to freedom- Underground Railroad Save heroes of rushed into burning bldg to save strangers BY Being more concerne d about otherswhat happens? Individuals who are more concerned for others than themselves can have a profound impact on the lives of others. Firstly, one person can drastically change the lives of millions of people. In addition to changing lives, individuals who are more concerned for others can improve the lives of those around them. Lastly, when people are more concerned about others, they don t think twice about putting themselves in danger to save the lives of their fellow man. No literature or historical reference- underdeveloped

11 Body Paragraph- Impact Lives Change MLK- fight for equal rights- I have a Dream Change Improve Save lives Improve Harriet Tubmanrisked her life and sacrificed her health by taking people to freedom- Underground Railroad Save heroes of rushed into burning bldg to save strangers BY Being more concerne d about otherswhat happens? Individuals who are more concerned for others than themselves can have a profound impact on the lives of others. Firstly, one person can drastically change the lives of millions of people. Martin Luther King wanted freedom, not just for himself- but for all people. When he gave his I Have a Dream speech, he initiated a peaceful movement toward equal rights that changed peoples thinking and eventual actions. In addition to changing lives, individuals who are more concerned for others can improve the lives of those around them. Harriet Tubman was a heroic woman who cared so much for others that she risked her freedom, marriage, and health to secretly transport people from slavery to freedom through the Underground Railroad. Lastly, when people are more concerned about others, they don t think twice about putting themselves in danger to save the lives of their fellow man. To illustrate this, think about the firefighters, police, and citizens who rushed into the burning Twin Towers trying to save lives during the 9-11 attack.

12 Conclusion 1. Reword and rewrite the Thesis Statement 2. Closing Sentence- don t REPET! EXPOSITORY Embracing responsibilities and influencing the lives of others are model behaviors people expect to see from individuals who are more concerned about others than themselves. Cesar Chavez, a hero in the eyes of migrant workers, fasted for up to 36 days in an effort to prevent the people he loved and cared about from resorting to violence. His selfless behavior is remembered and celebrated decades later.

13 Conclusion 1. Reword and rewrite the Thesis Statement 2. Closing Sentence- don t REPET! PERSUSIVE I strongly believe that embracing responsibilities and influencing the lives of others are model behaviors people expect to see from individuals who are more concerned about others than themselves. I realize that not everyone agrees with me. Some people, for example, might think that people should be more concerned with themselves because each person is responsible for his/her safety and success in life. However, I think generosity, love, and concern for others is what makes a person special.

14 WRITE an essay explaining why it s important to take chances. Expository Essay 1 Be Courageous 2 F How does being courageous affect someone s life? Punch List- N F I Change MLK- fight for equal rights- I have a Dream Improve Harriet Tubman- risked her life and sacrificed her health by taking people to freedom- Underground Railroad xxxxxxxxxx Save heroes of rushed into burning bldg to save strangers xxxxxxxx specific examples L 6. xxxxxxxxxx

15 WRITE an essay explaining whether it is better to work by yourself or with a group. Expository Essay 1 Better to work in a group 2 F By working in a groupwhat happens? What gets accomplish ed? Punch List- N F I specific examples Space Shuttle-different people with different jobs to complete a mission rmed Forces- different expertise work together to accomplish tasks Soccer team-passing the ball Save people worked together in Sept 11 th tragedy to save lives Harry Potter with friends- watch out for each other; better chances of defeating the enemy Class projects- more knowledge, more resources, faster L

16 WRITE an essay explaining the effects of a twentieth century technology on merican culture. Expository Essay 1 The Internet has changed life 2 F How has the Internet changed merican culture/life? N F I Punch List- xxxxxxxxxxxxx xxxxxxxxx xxxxxxxxxx xxxxxxxx xxxxxxxxxx specific examples L 6. xxxxxxxxxxxx