Six Traits Writing Workshop WNY School Support Center UB Buffalo Public Schools. Jim Collins. The ELA Editing Task

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1 Six Traits Writing Workshop WNY School Support Center UB Buffalo Public Schools Jim Collins The ELA Editing Task

2 Editing and the English Language Arts Tests, 3-8 Writing For the writing section of the test at Grades 3, 5, and 7, students complete an editing task that consists of a paragraph containing errors in capitalization and punctuation (Grade 3) or in capitalization, punctuation, grammar, and usage (Grades 5 and 7). The student completes the task by identifying and correcting the errors. Students in Grades 4, 6, and 8 will answer two extended-response questions, one in the reading section and one in the listening section. The responses to the extended-response questions will be scored for writing as well as reading. Because the Regents Examination in English does not test students in independent writing, the New York State Testing Program, which has been created to align with the Regents examination, has eliminated the independent writing prompt from the writing section of the tests at all grade levels beginning in 2006.

3 Grade 3 English Language Arts Test Design Session 1 (Book 1, Reading) 3 4 passages (literary and informational) 20 multiple-choice questions 1 short-response question Session 2 (Book 2, Listening/Writing) 1 listening selection (literary) 4 multiple-choice questions 2 short-response questions 1 editing paragraph Total 4 5 passages 24 multiple-choice questions 3 short-response questions 1 editing paragraph 40 minutes 35 minutes (excluding reading aloud of passage) 75 minutes

4 English Language Arts Test Grades 3, 5, and 7 Grade 3 Grade 5 Grade passages 24 multiple-choice questions 3 short-response questions 1 editing paragraph 4 5 passages 24 multiple-choice questions 2 short-response questions 1 editing paragraph 5 6 passages 30 multiple-choice questions 4 short-response questions 1 editing paragraph 75 minutes 70 minutes (excluding reading aloud of passage) 80 minutes

5 Question Formats The English Language Arts Tests contain questions with a variety of formats, including multiple-choice, shortresponse, extended-response, and editing tasks. For multiple-choice questions, students select the correct response from four answer choices. For short- and extended-response questions, students write an answer to an open-ended question. The extended responses are scored for writing as well as for reading comprehension. For the editing task, students are required to make corrections and revisions to a short piece of writing. A sample editing paragraph will be included in the test to help guide students in completing the editing task.

6 Sample Editing Task for Grade 3 Before completing the editing task, students will be guided through a similar practice editing task to make sure that they understand how to complete this part of the test. For the practice task, the students will be given time to find the errors in the paragraph. The teacher will then go through the paragraph line by line with the class to make sure that the students have identified all the errors. The students will then complete the actual editing task independently. Below is a sample of both the practice task and the editing task.

7 Practice Editing Task for Grade 3 There are some mistakes in this paragraph in capital letters and punctuation. Let s correct them together. My red bicycle is my favorite toy. It used to belong to my big sister katie. She gave it to me. I ride it after School each day. I like my bicycle because it is my favorite color. Do you have a favorite toy.

8 Real Editing Task for Grade 3 4 Here is a paragraph a student wrote. The paragraph has some mistakes in capital letters and punctuation. Some sentences may have no mistakes. There are no mistakes in spelling. Read the paragraph, and find the mistakes. Draw a line through each mistake in the paragraph. Then write the correction above it. Winter is a fun month. It snows a lot where i live. I like to play in the snow. My Brother likes to play in the snow, too. We make snowballs and snow houses. when it gets dark, we go inside, but we know we can go out again the next day?

9 Practice Response for Grade 3 Question 4 Practice task corrections: Sentence 2: Katie should be capitalized. Sentence 4: The word school should start with a lowercase s. Sentence 6: The period should be changed to a question mark. There are some mistakes in this paragraph in capital letters and punctuation. Let s correct them together. My red bicycle is my favorite toy. It used to belong to my big sister katie. She gave it to me. I ride it after School each day. I like my bicycle because it is my favorite color. Do you have a favorite toy.

10 Exemplary Response for Grade 3 Question 4 Real task:

11 3-point Holistic Editing Task Rubric for Grade 3 3 points No more than one error, either introduced or not corrected, remains after the student has corrected the paragraph. 2 points Two errors, either introduced or not corrected, remain after the student has corrected the paragraph. 1 point Three errors, either introduced or not corrected, remain after the student has corrected the paragraph. 0 points Four or more errors, either introduced or not corrected, remain after the student has corrected the paragraph.

12 Sample Editing Task for Grades 5 and 7 Before completing the editing task, students will be guided through a similar practice editing task to make sure that they understand how to complete this part of the test. For the practice task, the students will be given time to find the errors in the paragraph. The teacher will then go through the paragraph line by line with the class to make sure that the students have identified all the errors. The students will then complete the actual editing task independently. Below is a sample of both the practice task and the editing task.

13 Practice Editing Task for Grade 5 There are some mistakes in this paragraph. Let s correct them together. My schoolis having a Back to School dance on Friday.I am excited aboutthem, but Ihave a problem. I don t know how to dance.ia m the only one in my family who has never took dance lessons. Well,Iguess I willjust create my own style. Ofdancing.

14 Real Editing Task for Grade 5 10 Here is a report a student wrote. There are some mistakes in the paragraph. Some sentences may have more than one mistake, and other sentences may contain no mistakes at all. There are no mistakes in spelling. Read the paragraph, and find the mistakes. Draw a line through each mistake in the paragraph. Then write the correction above it. Last weekend, my family and I wentto the new aquarium downtown. Itis one ofthe most largest aquariums in the state. When we first arrive at the aquariu m, w e saw real otters sharks, and penguins. Then we wentto the aquarium s Theater and saw a show called The amazing Oceans. Ilearned about different oceans across the world and aboutinteresting creatures thatlives in those oceans. It was so m uch fun to visitthe aquarium. Ican twaitto go back!

15 Practice Response for Grade 5 Question 16 Practice task corrections: Sentence 2: The word them should be changed to it. Sentence 4: The words never took should be changed to never taken. Sentences 5 and 6: The two sentences should be combined to avoid a sentence fragment; the period should be removed after the word style, and the word of should begin with a lowercase o. There are some mistakes in this paragraph. Let s correct them together. My schoolis having a Back to School dance on Friday.I am excited aboutthem, but Ihave a problem. I don t know how to dance.ia m the only one in my family who has never took dance lessons. Well,Iguess I willjust create my own style. Ofdancing.

16 Exemplary Response for Grade 5 Question 10 Real task:

17 3-point Holistic Editing Task Rubric for Grades 5 and 7 3 points No more than one error, either introduced or not corrected, remains after the student has corrected the paragraph. 2 points Two to three errors, either introduced or not corrected, remain after the student has corrected the paragraph. 1 point Four to five errors, either introduced or not corrected, remain after the student has corrected the paragraph. 0 points Six or more errors, either introduced or not corrected, remain after the student has corrected the paragraph.

18 Practice Editing Task for Grade 7 There are some mistakes in this paragraph. Let s correct them together. Ilike to go to the movies on weekends.itry to get to the theater early so Icould buy snacks. My favoritest movies are comedies. They are fun to watch with friends because they m ake you laugh we are going to see a new m ovie this Saturday.

19 Real Editing Task for Grade 7 16 Here is a report a student wrote. There are some mistakes in the paragraph. Some sentences may have more than one mistake, and other sentences may contain no mistakes at all. There are no mistakes in spelling. Read the paragraph, and find the mistakes. Draw a line through each mistake in the paragraph. Then write the correction above it. When you look up at the night sky, you see the beautifulstars shining, you see a full moon. The view from space can be quite another matter,though. Fro m Earth you cannot see none ofthe nuts, bolts, paint chips, and other assorted pieces of space debris orbitsearth every day. The worstthing about space debrisis notit s ugly appearance; space debris can be extremely dangerously. These bits of metaland otherjunk travels through the air at speeds greaterthan 20,000 miles an hour and can create serious damage.

20 Exemplary Response for Grade 7 Question 16 Practice task corrections: Sentence 2: The word could should be changed to can. Sentence 3: The word favoritest should be changed to favorite. Sentence 4: A period should be placed after the word laugh, and the next word ( we ) should be capitalized to correct the run-on sentence. There are some mistakes in this paragraph. Let s correct them together. Ilike to go to the movies on weekends.itry to get to the theater early so Icould buy snacks. My favoritest movies are comedies. They are fun to watch with friends because they m ake you laugh we are going to see a new m ovie this Saturday.

21 Exemplary Response for Grade 7 Question 16 Real task:

22 Conventions includes punctuation, spelling, grammar, usage, capitalization, and paragraph indentation. Abilities: Identify problems with conventions Fix problems with conventions

23 Key Strategies: Look for patterns Work on one pattern at a time Invent a strategy for each persistent problem: Sound-based misspellings Sight-based misspellings Homonym problems (e.g., there, their, they re) Paragraph boundaries Sentence boundaries Fragments and run-ons Comma, apostrophe, quotation marks Pronoun reference Agreement subject/verb; pronoun/antecedent Verb tense shifts Capital letters Usage problems Contractions Overuse of and then Comparatives and superlatives

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